Final Script

Final Script 
The images to the left and right are the 'skeleton script' I created for our opening sequence for 'Kin'. I initially made this script to serve as a basic idea of what the dialogue should resemble and how the characters in the scene should be portrayed. Csenge and I later analysed the script in order to identify any improvements that could be made. On the picture below you can notice the purple annotations Csenge and I added to improve the script.  


Below is the final script for Kin which Csenge and I will be distrubuting to our actors before our main film day.

‘KIN’

SCRIPT BY

EDWARD BARKER/ CSENGE NEMETI

FADE IN:

EXT. SIDINGS – DAY

Large, urban area with jarring imagery of nature and industrial, processed elements.

IVAN approaches the two hooded figures – TONY A and TONY B

IVAN

(Shifty and awkwardly laughs
in an attempt to make light of the
subject) Fancy seeing you two here

The characters experience an awkward silence here and thus IVAN moves on to explaining the character’s roles etc.

- INTERCUT TONY A BIO –

IVAN

TONY A likes killing people and
is essentially a hit
man, but rather the hit or miss
sort.

- CUT TO SIDINGS SCENE –

IVAN

So... I guess you work for me now?

TONY B

No, we worked for your dad. (Puts
 emphasis on ‘worked’) Except I don’t
know if you noticed, but your dad’s
not around anymore.

- INTERCUT TONY B BIO –

IVAN

TONY B, well he also likes to
kill, but there’s a difference
in the fact that he’s not trigger
happy.

- CUT TO SIDINGS SCENE –

IVAN

Well I figured, with dad gone...
I’m the new head?

TONY B

Well you figured wrong kid...

TONY A

(Interrupting TONY B)Just go back
home to that mum of yours.
(Both snigger and laugh at the
implied sexual innuendo)How is
she now a days anyway?

IVAN

(addressing TONY B)... What did
you call me here for TONY?

TONY B

This (throws mobile phone).

TONY A

He told us to give it to you
in case he was ever... busy.

TONY B

He said to check your voice-
mail.

TONY A

Run along kid.

- STRAIGHT CUT TO VOICEMAIL SCENE -